Artistic Thoughts

Artistic Things, Spam, Games n stuff
 
HomeHome  PortalPortal  FAQFAQ  SearchSearch  RegisterRegister  MemberlistMemberlist  UsergroupsUsergroups  Log in  

Share | 
 

 Sometimes

Go down 
AuthorMessage
Wimpiej

avatar

Number of posts : 10
Age : 29
Registration date : 2007-05-13

PostSubject: Sometimes   Sun May 13, 2007 5:14 pm

Sometimes I feel like a fallen angel,
so alone here in the night.
And then I see the stars in the sky,
they say to me the sky is bright.

Sometimes I feel like a singing mockingbird,
sitting all alone in a tree.
Then I hear some other mockingbirds,
they are singing just like me.

Sometimes I feel like I am lonesome,
sitting somewhere no ones around.
Then I hear you, a voice of an angel,
for me that is a beautiful sound.

sometimes I feel, I just feel nothing,
I only feel my empty heart.
Then you step by, and I felt something.
I feel the love deep in my heart!
Back to top Go down
View user profile
Camille

avatar

Number of posts : 356
Age : 29
Localisation : The Netherlands
Registration date : 2007-05-11

PostSubject: Re: Sometimes   Sun May 13, 2007 9:45 pm

I like it ^^ 9/10
Back to top Go down
View user profile
The Torn One
Admin
avatar

Number of posts : 382
Age : 28
Localisation : The NetherLands
Registration date : 2007-05-09

PostSubject: Re: Sometimes   Sun May 13, 2007 9:57 pm

9/10 ..

weer paar typfoute xD ... mjah da maakt nie zoveel uit ..
Back to top Go down
View user profile http://artisticthoughts.forumotion.com
Daedroth

avatar

Number of posts : 281
Localisation : Dutch
Registration date : 2007-05-11

PostSubject: Re: Sometimes   Mon May 14, 2007 7:32 pm

8.5/10
Back to top Go down
View user profile
DarkArtemis

avatar

Number of posts : 18
Age : 31
Localisation : Wisconsin
Registration date : 2007-05-10

PostSubject: Re: Sometimes   Mon May 14, 2007 9:14 pm

very nice Smile i like the way you started each stanza with "sometimes I feel."

Quote :
Sometimes I feel like a singing mockingbird,
sitting all alone in a tree.
Then I hear dome other mockingbirds,
they are singing just like me.

I especially like that stanza. Smile very well done
Back to top Go down
View user profile
Sponsored content




PostSubject: Re: Sometimes   

Back to top Go down
 
Sometimes
Back to top 
Page 1 of 1

Permissions in this forum:You cannot reply to topics in this forum
Artistic Thoughts :: Poetrie / Music text :: Wimpiej-
Jump to: